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   成都全搜索教育频道 / 07-12-21 15:01:15 / 作者:   来源:综合   

  Example 8:

  During my senior year at Purdue University, I made a decision that has impacted the entire course of my education。 While my classmates were making definite decisions about their career paths, I chose to implement a five-year plan of development and growth for myself。 I designed this plan inorder to examine various careers that I thought might interest me, as well as to expand upon my abilities at the time。

  Example 9:

  I am most interested in a career in psychoneurotic immunology。 Scientists who work in this areastudy the biological connection between the mind and immunological factors relating to health and healing。 This is my ideal occupation because it includes my two criteria for a career: I wouldbe doing something to benefit society and performing a job that is enjoyable, challenging and meaningful to me。  读完了以上这些 PS 的开头,是不是有一种与众不同的感觉呢?总结一下,开头的类型有很多,可以表明精彩的观点,可以叙述特别事件,可以引用名人警句,总之要与众不同。

  招生委员会要看很多 PS,如果你的 PS 不能在一开始就先声夺人,吸引人家读下去,那这一整篇就基本没有感染力了。试想想,换成你自己,已经读了一整天的文章了,看到的都是千篇一律的东西,你还有没有心情继续看下去呢?所以说开头很关键。招生委员会的人只会花上一到两分钟阅读你的 PS,因此你必须利用开头从一开始就抓住他们的兴趣。在写完主体部分之后,你甚至可能需要考虑重写开头部分。

  1.在开头部分不要进行概括。问问自己读者为什么在读完开头之后还想继续往下读。

  如果你对情况作概括的话,教授就不需要阅读余下的部分了。

  2.在开头部分设置悬念或埋下伏笔。没有必要也不建议你在写第一句话时就表明主题。

  在读者的心中设下问题,促使他们继续阅读下去,激发他们的兴趣,使他们理解你的主题。

  美国人的文章向来是开门见山的,不像中国人那样做了很多铺垫才切入正题。虽然说可以不要在开头直接点出主题,但是你的主题一定要在前面三段中得到陈述,否则人家读了半天也不知道你在说什么。我个人所推崇的是开门见山的类型,在文章的开头就表明你的主题,不要做过多的铺陈。

  下面再来举几个失败的结尾的例子。

  Example 10:

  I would like to thank the admissions committee for considering my application。 It is my sincerehope that you will grant me the opportunity to attend your fine school。

  Example 11:

  In sum, there are three reasons why you should admit me……Example 12:

  From the college guide and my adviser’s recommendation, I am pleased to learn that your program has a highly qualified faculty and ample resources。 It will be the best place for me to pursue an individualized plan of studies。 If possible, my major interest in the future will reside in the following areas: Signal Processing, Image Processing, and DSP。 The undergraduate educationwas very general, so if you feel that any other areas are more suitable for me, some comments and suggestions will be highly appreciated。

  第一个结尾,犯了老毛病,废话一句,谁不知道你写 PS 的目的呢?我们在这里要强调的是,任何情况下都不要让这样的句子在你的 PS 中出现。

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